So you have a great monologue but there’s some issues..
You need to capitalize your I’s
“ I have no flaws and I’m perfect”, Add a question mark instead of a period.
“But nothing did” you can add a comma before the the but after him and I.
Make sure you capitalize your words after a period.
“It broken me”, doesn’t make sense, it’s a fragment. You can use “it’s breaks my heart to think about it”.
“Actually something happen”, can you explain what happened? So it’s not left like that.
Other than that your doing well
Hope this helps you *smiles*
